In the article entitled, ‘At Home with Mamma’,
Antonella Cappon states that the kids who leave home at early ages are ones who
are missing something in terms of affection, and the problems come from a lack
of affection. Moreover, she thinks that there are no people who are
psychologically unbalanced because they got too much love or protection at
home. I partially agree with Antonella Cappon because children should stay with
their family until 20 not 30 ages for some reasons.
Firstly,
Antonella Cappon is right because children need to be protected by their
families and they need their parent’s love and affection, so they should stay
with their families. A lack of parent’s love may affect the children
psychologically. Therefore, people may make lots of mistakes and wrong
decisions due to a lack of affection for their lives. Moreover, most of the
children at early ages may start smoking, using alcohol and drugs. A lack of
affection lies at the bottom of murders, suicides and crimes. In my opinion, in
order to decrease the rate of suicides, crimes and using drugs, the children
should live with their parents and get their love.
On the other
hand, I disagree with her because the people in their twenties should learn how
to stand on their own legs in my opinion. Both men and women need to learn
certain things like cooking, ironing, earning money and solving their problems
before they get married. In order to learn them, they should live alone after
they get their parent’s affection. Living with family after 20 ages may make
the people lazy and incompetent. When they face with a problem, they always
trust their mother or father because they know that their family always helps
them to solve the problems. Therefore, when they have to solve it alone, they cannot
do it. Moreover, when they have a problem with their husband or wife, they do
not try to solve it together, on the contrary, they always ask for advice from
their parents even in a little family problem. This may cause great problem,
further discussion and even divorce. People at their twenties should live
without their family at least in order to learn how to solve their own problems
alone.
In conclusion,
children need their parent’s protection and affection until certain ages and
then they should live alone because parent’s affection may not lead the
children psychologically unbalanced, but it may cause them lazy and
incompetent.
Dear Zahide,
YanıtlaSilI liked your journal entry very much. Your topic is very successful. You preferred an interesting subject. I completely agree on your ideas. However, when I am reading your journal, I see some punctuation mistakes. Some of them result from your forgetfulness. For instance, you should have used ''on the contrary'' with semicolon before it and comma after it. With respect to the content of your journal, I think you gave voice to really essential points of it, which is very useful. As for organization of your paragraph, I can say it is so convenient to our typical writing rules; that is, you arranged your reasons in order and lined them up respectively. Lastly, when it comes to your language use, it is very good and everthing is perfect and if you pay more attention while writing, you have not any mistakes and your journal will be greater. By the way, I find fluent to read your paragraphs, it goes fluently and I have to say that you have a nice style of writing. It was a pleasure for me to read your journal. Thank you Zahide :)